1) Wangan, a bright and most successful student in our class, scores high in all courses she takes. From primary school to college, she is an A student and awarded scholarships every year. But no one expects she has mentally collapsed recently simply because she failed to be selected in her department as the candidate for studying overseas. Wangan's case is not rare, but reflects a common phenomenon which shows that success is not always a good thing. (通过描述故事引出观点:成功并不一定好)

2) Success, especially the one that comes easily, is damaging.(主题句)The child who wins the first prize in a painting contest with limited entries, the student who gets three A's in his first year of primary school, the adult who distinguishes himself at a first job by accident may face probable disappointment and frustration when real challenges arise.(成功来之容易,往往在遇到真正挑战时就束手无策)

3) Success is also bad when it's achieved at the cost of the total quality of an experience.(主题句) For example, successful students are often the ones who are so obsessed with grades that they never enjoy other activities on campus and in life. They never dare venture into new areas. And the lack of experiences in different fields tends to contribute to frustration and failure when they handle problems beyond their fields.(以牺牲发展其他方面的能力而获得单一方面的成功有害无益)

4) Success can be destructive for it produces unbearable pressure.(主题句) To score high in learning, to pass college entrance examination, to defeat rivals in fierce competition, one has to work under extremely terrible pressure and drive himself too hard to a point where he sees a single examination as a matter of life and death. Hence come many tragedies.(为获取成功而承受巨大压力也会带来害处)

5) It is time to rethink of our view of success. We may ask ourselves: Is it good for our society--for our parents, for our media--to place so much emphasis on success?(提出重新考虑对成功的价值观，以提问题结束,发人深思)

闪光点：

1. 以一个具有典型意义,说明主题思想的故事开头,既能吸引读者,又能加深印象。

2. 以具体事例说明观点。第二段中The child who...，the student who ... the adult who, 三个例子都很有说服力。

3. 句型变化:Hence come many tragedies.(倒装句)the lack of experiences in different fields tends to contribute to frustration(非人称句)

4. 词汇亮点: distinguishes himself, challenge arise, at the cost of, be obsessed with, to a point where, venture into new areas, work under pressure

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