1) The flower in the greenhouse looks safe and healthy though it is raining heavily outside. But accustomed to the comfort of the greenhouse, it is easily killed by the storm when moved out of the greenhouse and exposed to harsh environment because it has never experienced any terrible weather and is not strong enough to endure any hostile attack.(两张图画的描写)

2) The cultivation of a flower reminds me of the two ways of bringing up children. One is a Chinese way and another is American way. (承上启下句:从养花的不同方式转到中美教育制度的比较) The majority of Chinese parents try every means to provide the best possible living conditions for their children and to shelter them from any possible hardship and failure. While American counterparts tend to drive their children out of parental houses when they reach a certain age and make them live independently and test failure.

3) It is understandable that Chinese children, granted whatever their demand as they are mostly the only one child in their family, have enjoyed the best love and protection from parents and grandparents. But by doing so, they are robbed of the opportunity to take responsibility for their mistakes and think for themselves. Such practices run the risk of producing children like the flower in the pictures(中国教育制度的优缺点)

4) It may be cruel that children are forced to leave their parents to live on their own. They will surely meet unexpected difficulties and frustration without their parents' help. But frustration and failure are not bad things. Instead they are essential to their growth, for they can help children to accumulate experience. How can a person achieve anything if they do not go through all kinds of hardships andfrustration?(困难和挫折有助于孩子成长)

5) To avoid the fate like the flower in the greenhouse, our parents should create opportunities for their children to experience more hardships. It should be realized that true love to a child is to' cultivate them in a way that will help them to become tough enough to face diffculties and challenges.(回到花朵的培养,点出其深刻意义)

闪光点:

1.词汇运用：accustomed to, exposed to, endure attach, shelter them from, robbed of the- opportunity, take responsibility, run the risk of, accumulate

2.低频词汇：hostile, harsh, grant,cultivate, accumulate, counterpart

3.词汇变化：shelter-protect; go through'--experience, students--counterparts, independent-think for themselves, challenges-difficulties

4.句式丰富：the cultivation of a flower, accustomed the comfort of the greenhouse, it should be realized,it is understandable that ...

责任编辑：admin