杨译：
“So you’ve given them that pouch I made you too!” she remarked. “All right，that’s the last thing you'll ever get from me.” Going crossly back to her own room, she took her scissors and started cutting up the sachet she had been making for him at Baoyu's own request.
Baoyu, seeing that she was angry, knew that something was up and hurried after her. Too late. Although the sachet had not been finished，the embroidery on it was very fine and she had put a lot of work into it, so he was annoyed to see it spoilt for no reason. Quickly undoing his collar, he pulled out the pouch he was wearing over his red tunic.
“Look，what’s this?” he asked, showing it to her. "When have I ever given anything of yours to someone else?"
Realizing that he treasured her gift so much that he had kept it safely hidden away，Daiyu repented of her hastiness and hung her head in silence.
“You didn’t have to cut it up，" went on Baoyu reproachfully. “I know you don’t like giving me anything, so I'll let you have this one back too，how about that?”Tossing it into her lap，he turned to go.
Choking with anger Daiyu burst into tears. She picked up the pouch meaning to cut it to pieces as well. But he rushed hack to stop her，begging，“Dear cousin, spare it!”
霍译：
'so you've given away that little purse I gave you? Very well, then. You needn’t expect me to give you anything in future， however much you want it!'
With these words she went off to her own room in a temper, and taking up a still unfinished perfume sachet which she was making for him at his own request，she began to cut it up with her embroidery scissors, Bao-yu，observing that she was angry，had hurried after her — but it was too late. The sachet was already cut to pieces.
Although it had not been finished, Bao-yu could see that the embroidery was very fine，and it made him angry to think of the hours and hours of work so wantonly destroyed. Tearing open his collar he took out the little embroidered purse which had all along been hanging round his neck and held it out for her to see.
'Look! what’s that? when have I ever given anything of yours to someone else?'
Dai-yu knew that he must have treasured her gift to have worn it inside his clothing where there was no risk of its being taken from him. She regretted her over-hasty destruction of the sachet and hung her head in silence.
'You needn’t have cut it up, ' said Bao-yu. ‘I know it’s only because you hate giving things away. Here，you can have this back too since you’re so stingy! '
He tossed the purse into her lap and turned to go. Dai-yu burst into tears of rage, and picking up the little purse, attacked that too with her scissors. Bao-yu hurried back and caught her by the wrist.
'Come，cuzzy dear!' he said with a laugh. 'Have mercy on it!'
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