1) With the increased standard of living and the declining working weeks, more and more city-dwellers are taking their holidays in scenic spots and places of interest. Most of them like to join package tours as this mode of travel is said to be most convenient. But I prefer to travel individually for freedom.(引出两种不同的旅游方式,并表明倾向于自助旅游,因为自由)

2) It is true that joining a package tour can bring great convenience. You don't have to worry about room and board during the travel, nor about your transportation. The guide will take 'care of everything. What you do is to follow the guide and enjoy the scenery. But you lose your freedom for this. At the sight of his/her flag waving, you have to take yourself away from the scenes you are marveling at and follow the guide whose sole interest is to cover all spots according to his schedule, regardless of the weather or your health condition. (先肯定旅行社旅游的优点,接着就分析其缺点)

3) Individual travel, however, gives you a great degree of freedom. (主题句)In climbing mountains, you can choose to drive up in cable cars, or take pleasure in the process of climbing.  You can decide when to start your way, where to linger a little longer and which spot to be skipped over to save time for another spot. You can always adjust your plan.(然后转到自助旅游上,详细阑述其优点,如可以自由安排日程等)

4) Travelling alone, you may encounter inconvenience such as getting accommodation for the night and a place for meals. But you can choose the hotel and restaurant to your liking, and avoid the embarrassment of being forced to share a table or a room with a stranger.(用一句话承认自助旅游有食宿困难,但在这一点上继续分析其优点,如可以找自己喜欢的饭店和旅馆等)

5) To have a holiday tour is to enjoy and relax yourself, and to relax thoroughly, freedom is of essence. If you lose the freedom of action, it is no longer a holiday in anything but name. For this reason I like travelling alone with several friends.(归纳自助旅游的优点)

闪光点:

1.首尾呼应:But I prefer to travel individually for freedom. - For this reason I like travelling alone with several friends.

2.具体描写:At the sight of his/her flag waving, you have to take yourself away from the scenes you are marveling at, choose to drive up in cable cars, or take pleasure in the process of climbing

3.用词变化:travel alone--travel individually--travel independently, room and board-accommodation

4.句型变化:You can decide when to start your way, where to linger a little longer and which spot to be skipped over to save time for another spot. You can always adjust your plan.(长短句)

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